Morning has been so quiet,
I can hear the humming
of my house-
refrigerator, clock’s second hand,
whirring fan, laptop charging.
My own breath sounds enormous
and when I open a window,
birds scream and the sky laughs with wind.
I stay just inside the door,
unsettled within but not at all sure
I want to go out.
Moving freely but days ago,
shivering in place now.
I would like to tuck away
these times in-between.
This is a really nice piece of poetry. I think there’s a great sense of energy taken from the opening stanza and the way we feel a sense of being bombarded by sound. While the descriptions make me feel like the speaker is in-between places, literally speaking, they evoke a sense of being emotionally in-between metaphorical places.
I enjoyed reading this one.
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This is lovely- thank you for your comments!
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Yes, and save them forever. This is very beautiful. Your visual imagery and very audible choices of words put me right there with you. This is amazing, and I love it.
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What wonderful responses I’m garnering today! I’m so glad to know my writing is reaching someone.
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